What is friendship? I believe friendship is something that you have with someone else. You could have known this person for a long time or a short period of time, but if you can trust the person and you know you can trust them with anything you tell them, then you have a friendship with this person. My friendship is based on a couple of things. Trust, honesty and loyalty are all things I believe you need in a good friendship. You could also help the person out of something and by doing that you start a friendship and you should be there when the person needs your help. I do think Jim and Long John sliver have a friendship.They might not slow it all the time but when they both needed each other, there true friendship came out. There are two many examples in the book that show there true friendship.
In the begging of the story Jim was sent out to find Long John Sliver at a bar to tell him that he has the job to be the cook for the ship. When they meet they started a great conversion and were interacting a lot. Both seemed to like each other and believed that they could start a friendship. Once Jim realized who Long John Sliver really is he look at him another way and Jim didn't believe that he could trust him anymore. Jim was getting very suspicious, so he hide in a apple barrel and lisined to Long John's conversion with his fellow piraites about how they are going to kill everyone and take the treasure for them selves. "from these dozen words I understood that the lives of all the honest men aboard depended upon me along" (65) This made jim not think of him as a friend but a enemy.
After Jim was captured by the pirates they brought him back to the stockade were they tied his hand and legs. All of the pirates were convinced in killing Jim but Long John sliver didn't think that they should. "Ive always liked you, I have, for a lad of spirit and the picter of my own self when i was a young and handsom" (180) When this happens Jim realizes what Long John Sliver has done for him and is very thankful. This made Jim think about the Captain and how he has a nice side inside him. Everyone thinks of a pirate as a bad person who wants treasure and will kill anyone that they need to.
At the end of the book when the good mates found the treasure in the cave they were very happy and just wanted to get it to the Hispaniola to state there voyage back to their home land. After the treasure was abored the ship they didn't know what to do with Long John Sliver. There plain at first was to bring him back to Bristol, England were he could go on trial for being a pirate. Then Jim was thinking about what Long John sliver did for him and that he could maybe be dead right now if it wasn't for him. So, Jim decided to let Long John Sliver sneak away so that he would have to go on trial and be hanged. "He had cut though a bulkhead unobserved and hand removed one of the sacks of coins, worth, perhapss, three or four hunderd guineas, to help him on his further wanderings" (222) Jim was thinking good thoughts about the captian and hoped he is living in good comfort. "perhaps still lives in comfort" (223)
Sometimes you will never think that this person could be your friend. If you can trust this person and you know they are being honest with you then the they could be your friends one day. You would never think that Jim and Captain Long John Sliver could become friends and have each others backs. This just shows you that you could make friends with someone you would never think of being fiends before
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first of all..Good luck tuesday man..Amherst is going downn..Essay is looking good. It is easy to understand the point you are trying to state. keep it up
ReplyDeleteI think you have a good start to your essay :]
ReplyDeleteIt's a good start, and none is supposed to be known but other then that you have a good point to prove
ReplyDeleteThe thesis is about Long John Silver and Jim's friendship. How from the very beginning of the story they had a connection. I don't think you have a solid thesis though, just a topic.
ReplyDeleteThe best quote you have is "Ive always liked you, I have, for a lad of spirit and the picter of my own self when i was a young and handsom" (180. This is because it's the only quote you have in your story... We need 4, I think.
I think your best part is saying what a friendship is to you.
"My friendship is based on a couple of things. Trust, honesty and loyalty are all things I believe you need in a good friendship" you should bhuild on that idea, and say how Jim and Long John's friendship has those qualities.
When you make your final revisions, you should check spelling and read the sentences to make sure they go with each other. But other than that it's a good start. :]
Your essay was very good. I especially like how you started the first paragraph with a question. There were a few edits I would make, though. The first edit I would make would be either taking out or adding to this sentence;I believe friendship is something that you have with someone else. It is a good sentence, but most people would probably know that before reading the essay. Another edit I would make would be in the sentence; You could have none this person for a long time or a short period of time, but if you can trust the person and you know you can trust them with anything you tell them, then you have a friendship with this person. Instead of you could have none, in the begining of the sentence,the sentence would sound better with you could have known.I would also take out either; if you can trust the person or and you know you can trust them with anything you tell them because they both are saying the same thing in a different way. Although there were a few errors I could find, the essay was pretty well written over-all.
ReplyDeleteThe main idea of your essay seemed to be friendship and Jim and Long John Silver’s friendship together. I thought your essay was pretty focused and clear, even though it was hard to understand at times because of grammar errors. Your essay seemed to be pretty engaging to me because the essay started of with a question about the essay’s topic and told the parts of the story you wrote about pretty well.
ReplyDeleteOut of the three quotes you had in your essay, I thought;"Ive always liked you, I have, for a lad of spirit and the picter of my own self when i was a young and handsom" was the best quotation you used to support your essays topic because John Silver seems to be complimenting Jim really well in that quote, showing friendship beginning to form. The second quote; "He had cut though a bulkhead unobserved and hand removed one of the sacks of coins, worth, perhapss, three or four hunderd guineas, to help him on his further wanderings" (222) was still a good quote to use, but wasn’t as much about friendship, but more about how John Silver escaped. The third quote; “Jim was thinking good thoughts about the captian and hoped he is living in good comfort. "perhaps still lives in comfort", still supported the main idea of the essay, better than the second quote, but not as well as the first quote.
One thing I noticed you did well with in your essay, would be starting the introduction and leading the reader in to his essay. A good example of this would be; “What is friendship?”; the first sentence in the first paragraph of the essay.
One thing I would suggest for your revisions would be to check over your grammar. There were a lot of spelling mistakes and missing words that made your essay more confusing.